Indian Epics

For this story lab assignment, I actually just did revisions for a story I've already posted to my portfolio. I did the comma challenge, as I tend to get very comma-happy. I noticed that almost all of the sentences in the story had commas and was able to remove quite a few. Sometimes that took reworking a sentence, but most of the time I just had to rearrange a couple words. I also took the notes from Laura and applied them to the story. Here is the link .

Update: This story has been added and edited to my portfolio site here . Diana landed over the wall, her bracelets up and ready to protect her from the bullets of the many guards she thought would be patrolling the grounds. But as she looked around, there was no one to be found - where was everyone? She warily started towards the mansion, an uneasy feeling in her stomach as she got closer and closer. This was too easy.... All of a sudden, right as she got within about ten feet of being able to peer into one of the mansion windows, alarms started blaring! She looked around to see where they were coming from and to find a point of entry so she could find Steve before the guards got to her. The less fighting necessary, the better. Jumping behind some bushes under a large window, she was just about to walk around to the back of the house to find a door, when she saw a man running as fast as he could down the hill away from the house. One second later, she realized it was Steve. Sprinting...

Edit: This story is now listed on my portfolio site. Diana stood outside of Herr Schneider's estate, pondering her options. Steve had said that this was a crucial diplomatic mission, and breaking into the compound would put all of his hard work in jeopardy, but she had to get in somehow. He had spent so much time and energy just getting Schneider to agree to meet, and Wonder Woman causing a scene on the German's estate with multiple witnesses and would break the already fragile peace negotiations. Diana, Princess of the Amazons, Daughter of Hippolyta, and the Pride of Themyscira, had been posing as Steve Trevor's secretary for three years now. Had her mother found that her cover in the world of men was essentially an aide, she would have been disappointed and indignant that the heir to the Amazonian throne was taking meeting notes and fetching coffee. It had turned out though, that the only way to stay close to Steve and be privy to all the missions he went on was to be hi...

NOTE: This story is now published on my portfolio site, here . Hippolyta held her little Diana, finally asleep after a long day of learning from all of her aunts. The angelic looking 7-year-old had a slight smile on her face, resting with her head in the lap of her mother. Looking down at her, Hippolyta reflected on the mystery of her child, formed from clay and given breath by the gods, who had scarcely interacted with humans or Amazons for centuries. She wondered what was awaiting Diana; what would her destiny be? The pride Hippolyta felt over her daughter and her incredible abilities at such a young age and her adoration for the child were tempered by a constant uneasiness at the thought of Diana's destiny, still unknown. The Amazons were a proud race of women, all as fiercely loyal to each other as sisters, and all more accomplished in every way than even the most powerful of men in the world outside of Themyscira. Isolated on their island for centuries, the women had spent t...

Mr. and Mrs. Crocodile Please Note: The current version of this story is on my portfolio site.  Mrs. Crocodile is sitting in her weekly women's group meeting, eating some of the river eel and algae rolls her best friend, Mrs. Piranha, always set out. They had so much to catch up on... Mrs. Crocodile was getting bigger every day with the little babies growing, and her husband had been up to more of his usual antics. She loved Mr. Crocodile, but sometimes she wondered how he managed before she came along. "Hello, honey," said Mrs. Piranha. "How are you today? Those little guys giving you a hard time?" "No, not bad. I'm just enjoying getting to eat all these delicious rolls... you know they're my favorite. All of these cravings have been so strange. Just the other day I had the most intense one for monkey's heart." "Monkey's heart?! Those pests are impossible to catch, but oh so delicious if you can manage to snag a bite....