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Week 15 Story: Revisions



For this story lab assignment, I actually just did revisions for a story I've already posted to my portfolio. I did the comma challenge, as I tend to get very comma-happy. I noticed that almost all of the sentences in the story had commas and was able to remove quite a few. Sometimes that took reworking a sentence, but most of the time I just had to rearrange a couple words.



I also took the notes from Laura and applied them to the story.

Here is the link.
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